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This morning your fingers were busy
withholding a slice of your life from the world;
your fingers shaped a new existence
with quiet persistence
as you whittled away the many bytes into a few.

When you were done with your rebirth
you gently beckoned me to see
how quickly a life's history
can change and be fashioned anew.

No regrets, you said, no remorse
no sorrow and no recourse
but only to march on ahead
to forge fresh memories
and open uncharted pathways instead.

Now we will live with the promise of new histories
expansive and unfolding like exquisite mysteries--
we will remake and create
who we are,
how we live,
what to give
of ourselves to each other,
when to reject reality
and embrace our imaginations
because we are no longer contained
by that which we have let go
for our present will soon be our past
and our future a landscape breathtaking and vast.
It is sometimes easy to forget that you do have some control over your own life history as it appears online, especially on FB. This poem is inspired by the new beginnings that emerge out of the virtual realm. 
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drakonwriter Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very interesting.
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carmennge Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for your comment, Josiah :) Care to elaborate on what you found interesting? I'd love to know :D (Big Grin) 

I also see you are brand new to deviantart! Welcome! Hug 

I'm going to read your deviations since I see you have posted a couple! Enjoy your time here and if you have any questions, please do not hesitate to ask. People here are all super friendly and very nice Love 
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drakonwriter Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It may not be the message you were trying to express, what I took away from it was that we are not who were are in the web. We can hide ourselves, change ourselves, and be whatever we want to be.
And thank you for reading them. On the Gryphon Age chapter, I'm really just looking to see how interesting it is or if it needs to be changed in some way to make it clearer/better. On the other one... Looking at its potential as the beginning of a story.
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quentinfeld Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Writer
Should "unchartered" be "uncharted"?

For some reason my favorite part of this poem is the word "withholding" in the second line. It was unexpected.
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carmennge Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
WHOAAA!!! Thanks so much for pointing out that typo, Quentin! I just fixed it... thanks to you :)

Thanks for noticing "withholding" as well... I originally had a different verb, namely "erasing" but it didn't really capture the action as well. I guess "withholding" best describes the "hide" function on FB :D (Big Grin) 

Appreciate all your comments and welcome to deviantart! I notice you are a new member... you will have great fun and make great friends here!! Looking forward to reading your work too! Hug 
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quentinfeld Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student Writer
Aww, thanks.
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